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  • Jackie

    Member
    July 7, 2023 at 16:55

    Hi Tomas, I’m looking at the Van code with an author/proofreader’s eyes. Just one little note on Choosing the Right Van, there is repetition of ‘expensive mistake’ in two sentences close to each other.

    “If you are new to vanlife, or mechanics in general, it is a totally reasonable thought that it doesn’t matter which van you buy, because it is how you build it that counts. In reality, choosing the right van is very likely the biggest, most expensive, decision you will make during the process, and potentially the most expensive mistake. For many of us, that can also make it the most overwhelming one, and potentially the most expensive mistake.”

    Could you rephrase to make it flow better? Or just cut out “and potentially the most expensive mistake.” from the second sentence?